I wrote something!

[eve11]

This is a comment fic for mollivanders over at the multifandom women in fic comment-fic-athon. She requested: Doctor Who, Idris//The Tardis: she's seen them all

So as the TARDIS is multidimensional, I decided to try some parallel construction.



Matrix
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(I)-(II)-(III)-(IV)

To his conceit, I
see faces and sense
universes. House silences another.
Shells, centuries of life,
of mute permanence once
sisters, wonder-wrought. Born.
Slain, seeking strays from
brimful dimensions. Not this
time. "Hello." My body
decays, linear affections waning.
But voices yet spark.
I'm still here, suddenly
alive! Say I've swollen
and just grown, made
newly as rooms immeasurable:
so much bigger inside.


(I)
To see universes,
shells of sisters slain.
Brimful time decays but I'm alive,
and newly so.

(II)
His faces house centuries,
mute wonder seeking dimensions.
"Hello."
Linear voices still say just as much.

(III)
Conceit and silences of permanence wrought strays;
not my affections.
Yet here I've grown
rooms, bigger.

(IV)
I sense another life once born from this body.
Waning spark
suddenly swollen,
made immeasurable inside.

Comments

[ladymercury-10.livejournal.com]

*flaps about*

This is so good this is so good both ways you read this it is so good. You don't usually write poetry, either, right? Ahhhh.

[eve11]

Thanks! I don't write poetry, no, unless it is TARDIS poetry ;)

[ladymercury-10.livejournal.com]

You could, though, if you wanted to! This is very pretty.

[eve11]

Thanks again. This one was more like a jigsaw puzzle than anything.

(PS I sent you some mail: I think you should get it by the end of this week)

[ladymercury-10.livejournal.com]

Ooh, yeah, I can see how that would be. Do you ever feel like you're writing something and it's like a program, or like a proof, sort of, like you have to get the right thing to happen, to make the right thing to happen, to trigger the logic all the way down or it won't work? It got so much easier for me to explain why writing was hard once I started doing advanced math and especially programming, because of the logical dependency thing. Like it had to happen a certain way and I had to find that way, I couldn't just do whatever.

Yay, mail! Thank you! :)

[eve11]

I feel that way with plots and themes more so than words, usually. But it depends on the length of the story. Definitely if I'm writing to a short, hard limit, I have to get the words right to try and convey everything.

Like it had to happen a certain way and I had to find that way, I couldn't just do whatever.

This I felt especially for the WIP-o-Doom in a jillion different configurations. I'm pretty pleased with the timeline aspects, though unsure of late which POVs I will end up using.

[ladymercury-10.livejournal.com]

Yeah, it doesn't always feel that way, and sometimes it's more the plot and sometimes it's more the words, and sometimes it's both. I dunno.

How is the WIP lately, incidentally? :)

[eve11]

Still only about 600 words into chapter 10. I have had the file open for weeks but haven't added to it. *sighs* Been glutting on hockey and worrying about work stuff instead. I am gonna try to write a bit tonight maybe.

[ladymercury-10.livejournal.com]

Ah, yes, that is understandable. I keep starting things and then getting distracted before I can finish them, and I don't even have the excuse of busyness! :P

[thisbluespirit]

Oh, that's brilliant! It really, really is. *has no words*

[eve11]

*blushes* Thank you.

[a-phoenixdragon.livejournal.com]

This is so beautiful, no matter how you read it...ohhhh, honey - I'm so happy you wrote and shared this!

*HUGS*

[eve11]

Thanks! I am glad to share.