Wow, so much here! Also I had forgotten that fic_rush conversation but I did vaguely remember after you mentioned it & before I went to look.
It's a fab story and the commentary only makes it all the more impressive!
Also, while pruning out overused words is one thing, I don't think you should worry too much about adverbs. I mean, as long as it's not the "she shouted loudly" type, where they're redundant - also this is a humorous fic, and I've noticed in my own writing that there's a thing where they work in lighter pieces as they convey stuff at the right speed, whereas non-adverbs arrangements that do the same are often clunkier. (Ignore those English teacher types, blah de blah, what do they know about writing marvellous DW fanfic like this?)
And I'm not sure exactly what the 'boom box' should be called in British English, but not that. We (me and my two sisters) had things like that, bought in the early 90s and we kept them until they stopped working, because they had a radio and they still played tapes. The whole iPod revolution came a lot later to a lot of people. We just called them tape players, or radios, I think, but there probably was a more correct name in the Argos catalogue. So, if Clara had one later than that (as she very likely would), she might well keep it as long as it worked either for the radio or for old tapes that wouldn't play on anything else. It's fine. :-)
And, as ever, I'm impressed by the story and you and your writing skills all over again.
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It's a fab story and the commentary only makes it all the more impressive!
Also, while pruning out overused words is one thing, I don't think you should worry too much about adverbs. I mean, as long as it's not the "she shouted loudly" type, where they're redundant - also this is a humorous fic, and I've noticed in my own writing that there's a thing where they work in lighter pieces as they convey stuff at the right speed, whereas non-adverbs arrangements that do the same are often clunkier. (Ignore those English teacher types, blah de blah, what do they know about writing marvellous DW fanfic like this?)
And I'm not sure exactly what the 'boom box' should be called in British English, but not that. We (me and my two sisters) had things like that, bought in the early 90s and we kept them until they stopped working, because they had a radio and they still played tapes. The whole iPod revolution came a lot later to a lot of people. We just called them tape players, or radios, I think, but there probably was a more correct name in the Argos catalogue. So, if Clara had one later than that (as she very likely would), she might well keep it as long as it worked either for the radio or for old tapes that wouldn't play on anything else. It's fine. :-)
And, as ever, I'm impressed by the story and you and your writing skills all over again.
(But alas I no longer have a penguin icon.)